Spring is neat
Spring makes me run around
in bare feet
Yeah Estelle, you're not the only one here who can write poetry. Look at that Modernist genius right there; man I'm the next William Carlos Williams right here.
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Hmm...ok you might be able to win a Santa Cruz poetry competition with this...but not much else...
ReplyDeleteBut it's OK Aaron. I hope that won't diminish your self-image. It's all about relationship, you know.
This is incredible Aaron. The strict meter in lines 1,2, and 4, which is interrupted in line 3 parallels how the meaning is changed from just talking about Spring in 1 and 2, to talking about how Spring affects you personally. And I love the alliteration and internal rhyme and consonance... brilliant.
ReplyDeleteEstelle... wow, I cannot believe you right now. Watch this poem get published in multiple anthologies and translated into every known modern language.
ReplyDeleteSerena, thank you for your analysis. I'm glad at least somebody recognizes the true, laborious workmanship that went into constructing this piece. ;) haha
Roses are red, violets are blue
ReplyDeleteSome poems rhyme but this one doesn't
Aaron clearly gets his talent from his father.
Dad why don't you go comment on someone elses blog. I don't think Aaron appreciates the defacing of his talent of failing at poetry.
ReplyDeleteOh Aaron, I take back what I said before. This is perhaps one of the greatest poems written in the English language. Not only does the interruption of the meter that Serena mentioned provide insight into the unpredictability and undeniableness of Spring, but the simplistic language of "fun" and "neat" evoke a sense of childlike goodness and innocence. Moreover, imagery plays a critical role in proving Spring's sheer power to galvanize action.
ReplyDeleteThe poem shifts dramatically in line 3, both in terms of meter and in meaning. The speaker shifts from what defines Spring to how Spring makes him personally feel. So the season not only is fun and neat but also an impetus to taking action. Not just any action, but "run[ning] around/in bare feet" (lines 3-4). Spring has such an undeniable effect that the speaker has no choice but to strip his feet of the shoes that society has mandated that he wear and run without them. The image of a human breaking a social norm in order to return to his natural state— partially naked— indirectly alludes to Adam's and Eve's condition in Eden, when they were "naked and unashamed" (Genesis 2:25). By depicting such a socially abnormal action as heroic and natural, the author suggests that the beauty of Nature has the power to throw off the shackles of societal norms and allow humans to embrace our natural and original tendencies, such as running partially nude.
Through his mastery of meter, imagery, and allusion, Rickel provides a Santa Cruzian approach to responding to inexplicable natural beauties: running around naked.
ROFL this made my day xD You guys are so crazy. Estelle: I want to know how long that took you :P
ReplyDeleteIf you wrote it as round instead of around it would sound more like a chant.
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